帮我看看这几句英语有错吗？

一、帮我看看这几句英语有错吗？

尽管大家都帮你把句子改正了过来，但是这毕竟不是长久的办法——以后再写作文怎么办？

当老师的我给你几点写作方面的小建议：

1. 写作不是翻译，不宜逐字逐句地翻译。你的短文完全就是一篇翻译，这是写作的大忌。其实，在写作文的时候，我们只需要把汉语里的那个意思用英语表达出来就行了。打个比方说，你的这个句子“我觉得你是一个可爱的，害羞的男孩”，其实我们有很多方式可以表达出相同的意思：a. You are a lovely boy, but I you are too shy.    b. How lovely you are, but don't be shy, OK?    3. Why you are so shy? You are lovely.    4. Hei, lovely boy, why don't you believe yourself? You needn't be so shy.等等等等。

2. 积累单词、词组和句型并且熟练运用。当我们要表达什么事情的时候，其实我们都有特定的短语和句型来往上套的。比方说你的第三个句子“你像个洋娃娃”，像什么的短语是look like，be like，当然如果你要是不知道，那你也可以想想其他的表达方式，比方说，you are as beautiful as a doll. 或者说“Why you dress like a doll? 。从你的作文来看，句型和短语你积累的太少了。

3. 适当地加上一些连接和过渡的句子或单词，如and, but, so，however。这一点你在你的作文里做的很好了。

祝学习进步，快乐学好英语。

二、有关怎样描述自己的家庭成员以及时间的表达方式的英语作文

There are four people in my family. They are my parents ,my brother and I.My father is 180cm tall.My mother is 164cm tall.He is taller than her .But my brother is the tallest in my family. He is 181cm.My brother is a basketball player. He plays it very wel讥肠罐段忒灯闺犬酣华l.My father is a teacher.He teaches English in a primary school.He likes reading.My mother is a doctor. She is busier than my father.I am a elementary student.I like playing football.I like KaKa best. We love each other in my family. I think we are the happiest person in the world.

三、写英语作文EMAIL形式

Dear XXX,

How are you? It has been a long time since we last contacted each other.

How are you doing in University? Is it stressful? Mine is great. I feel more relaxed and we have more freedom now.

Next month, we will be holding a New Year celebration, which will also be our class reunion. I really hope that you will be able to attend. It will be a great chance for us to catch up with one another and I believe we will have a great time.

I will be anticipating you reply! Hope to see you soon.

Yours sincerely,

XXX